Monday, February 14, 2011
Responce 1, Week 5. Erickson
Erickson, this is a lovely bit of writing that has many admirable qualities. First off I love the way you artfully 'handled' the personification of hand throughout the work. The way the hands learn and mold and create; I like the way you give hands a personality and essentially make them a person. I also greatly enjoyed the dichotomy you build with how differently the hands 'handles' things. You made the reader consciously aware of the fact that we approach things differently with our touch and our grasp. The repetition of 'fists' at the end unsettled the flow of the work a little in my eyes, considering the repetition of 'hands'. I also thought it was very clever how you ended the work with good-bye.