Monday, March 21, 2011
Response 1, Week 8. Erickson
Erickson I love the use of musical imagery and the references to the classic jazz age musicians. The personification you create with the music was also something I really enjoyed. The artful way that you present the music and jazz as things that reside in your hair and how the guitar riffs drench the streets create such a powerful and visual image for the reader. And the ending alteration/personification 'raining rhythm' is good writing and really fleshes out the themes weather and jazz. The nickle and the angles line needs to be reworked because its awkward to say. Also I think the phrase 'real music never dies' is a little poesy and should be eliminated. I really enjoyed reading your work.